Week 8 Comments and Feedback

Feedback In

While I can read my stories and see plot holes or other thematic issues, I am really bad at catching things like grammar. So, the feedback that I have found the most helpful from students would be that pertaining to my grammar and other technical parts of my writing.

Feedback Out

I would like to think that my feedback is of at least decent quality. I use the "WWW" feedback strategy for most of my feedback and I think it has been working well. I like that gives me an outline to start with. It is even easy to remember so I don't have to pull up another window to work on feedback.

Blog Comments

I have enjoyed the blog comments, and I think that my blog is a decent place to learn about me. I think the one thing about the blog comments I would change is that it is mostly randomized. Thinking about it in terms of a physical classroom, people generally talk to the people sitting around them most often and other classmates less. While this doesn't let you get to know as many people, it let's you get to know a few people well. For me, I prefer quality over quantity, so being able to choose which blogs to comment on each time would be more my speed. Luckily, I do blog comments for extra credit in which case I do get to choose, and that has been really great.

Looking Forward

I would love to change up my introduction to include a little more biographical detail rather than just information on my summer. To make feedback more helpful to myself, I think for the most part just reading comments from the week before, at the beginning of my writing process could be helpful.

Info-graphic

(What Great Listeners Actually Do Tammay Vora)

I chose this info-graphic because, as someone that loves to talk, sometimes listening istn't my strong suit. I have been working on being a better and more compassionate listener recently so when I saw this graphic I thought it was fitting. While listening is an important part of relationship, and why I am trying to improve, listening is also important to feedback. If you can't understand and process what someone is saying in response to your work or your feedback, there isn't much point to the interaction. Understanding one another starts with listening, so doing it well is important.

Comments

Reading Notes: The Man in the Moon and Pygmalion

Hello! I couldn’t quite decide how to start these notes, so I decided I would stick with that theme and take style notes over how the stories in the anthology were started. Many of them started with some form of “ once upon a time,” or “one day” this included the stories in, The divine, Tricksters, and the Fairytales sections. This is a beginning I think a lot of us are familiar with from fairytales and has almost become a cliché in some ways. Unless I was going to write a fairytale, I don’t think that I would use this tool to start a story and even then, I might not. The other stories in the anthology had what I called a “ cold start ,” to distinguish them from the stories that used the “once upon a time” start. There were a few similarities that I noticed. The stories in the Origins section were a very cold start. For instance, “ The Man in the Moon ” only states that there was a blacksmith that didn’t like his job. We don’t learn anything about who he is as a p...

Reading Notes: Japanese Fairy Tales, Part B

Hi! I missed the second reading for this week, so I am making it up today with these reading notes over Japanese fairy tales. This reading included three stories, one of and Ogre, a Goblin, and a Princess not unlike the story of Cinderella. All three of these are from Japanese Fairy Tales by Yei Theodora Ozaki, who is pictured above with her husband. Out of the three stories, I liked the story about the Princes Hase the best, so I took notes over that story specifically. Here are those notes. The story of Princess Hase is told from a third person perspective. In the story there is very little dialogue. In fact, the only dialogue in the pieces, is that of the step-mother right before her poisoning attempt backfires and at the end when Hase’s father finds her hiding in the mountains. I think that this sparing use of dialogue at the worst and best point in the story is an interesting style choice that creased a stronger connection to the story at those points. I think that ...

Reading Notes: Persian Tales Part A

Hello! This week I chose to read the Persian Tales unit and was not disappointed. Some of these fairy tales like “The Boy Who Became a Bulbul” and “The Wolf-Aunt” reminded me of the Brother’s Grim Fairytales in their more original forms. The others seemed a little more child friendly like we might expect of fairytales today. Thinking of my story for this week, any of them could make a fun base for writing, but I think that the ones that would be the best to work with would be “The Boy Who Became a Bulbul,” “Nim Tanak,” or “Muhammad Tirandaz, The Archer.” For “The Boy Who Became a Bulbul” I would make the circumstances of the boy’s death make more sense to a modern reader, not just based on a bet with his father that he willingly submits to. I would also want to somehow bring the boy back, maybe instead of the Bulbul growing out of the stalk, he does. Or maybe his father doesn’t kill him but hides him instead. Either way I would like for the boy to live. For “Nim T...

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